WHERE HAVE YOU GONE
(by Mari Evans)
Where have you gone
with your confident
walk with
your crooked smile
why did you leave me
when you took your
laughter
and departed
are you aware that
with you
went the sun
all light
and what few stars
there were?
Where have you gone
with your confident
walk your
crooked smile the
rent money
in one pocket and
my heart
in another . . .
© Mari Evans
13 voices:
I like how the poem is one question, said over and over again.
lol! The last part of this poem was sad but humorous. :) Nice
aww so sad; you are better off without him
btw... I think I know that guy...
Thanks for stopping by Conscious Living.
I enjoyed reading this poem and others on your blog.
Glad we discovered each other.
There is much for me to learn here.
reth- sorry my comment didn't go through yesterday...
I said how wonderful a poem this is, that my heart jumped off the page and fell into another's pocket, maybe the same guy ascender knows :)
Love it. It's a story of romance gone wrong,a sweet sad tale that somehow still managed to make me smile.
For many poor women, this isn't just love lost, but a loss of being able to survive. When you're poor, dependency emotionally and financially is a lot of things but not funny. The dependency runs deep so deep that the need for emotionally and financially sometimes masquerades as love. I think the refrain, the repeating of the question demonstrates the sense of loss, bewilderment, even desperation- that shock we go through when we're totally devastated.
Susan, I agree with you. The nagging question is the centre of what's going on, here.
i believe the true beauty in this is how she has cloaked her grief,, her longing,, in a simple little sing song,, that says it all,,, while saying nothing at all....
It's an excellent poem to serve as repetition.Maybe the crooked smile should've given him away.
THe poem takes the theme out of the realm of an ordinary love poem when she also mentions the rent money. THe narrator has to survive without her rent and her heart.
Great image of the man walking away with his pockets full, of money, and a heart.
This is a great example of how less is more when writing. I love poems with questions, because most of us go around with one question after another in our minds.
UM..we r now learning this in english class...
why does she always skips lines?
and shouldn't it be confidence instead of confident?
what is the special part about this poem that outgos other poems?
well, i shouldn't be asking so much questions..
Man r like that. when they get bored of u they just go away with ur money and ur feelings.
oh well, enough talking 4 me..
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