25 February 2009

DEMAIN
(by Aimé Césaire)

Je suppose que le monde soit une forêt. Bon!
Il y a des baobabs, du chêne vif, des sapins noirs, du noyer blanc;
Je veux qu'ils poussent tous, bien fermes et drus, différents
de bois, de ports, de couleur,
mais pareillement pleins de sève et sans que l'un empiète
sur l'autre,
différents à leur base
mais oh!
que leurs têtes se rejoignent oui très haut dans l’éther
égal à ne former pour tous
qu’un seul toit
je dis l’unique toit tutélaire…

from "Et les chiens se taisaient", 1997



TOMORROW

I take the world to be a forest. Right!
There are baobabs, lively oak, black fir, the hickory tree;
I want them all to grow, strong and dense, each different
by wood, aspect, colour,
but equally filled with sap and with none encroaching
on another,
different at their base
but oh!
may their heads meet yes high up in the ether
equivalent to forming for all
just one roof
I say the only protective roof...
© Aimé Césaire
translated from the French by Rethabile Masilo


As usual in such cases, I beg Mr Césaire's pardon for attempting to translate his words. May he rest in peace. I encountered several difficulties in translating "Demain" from the original French into English, but the main one is perhaps the poet's use of the word toit, which means "roof". In French, toit (roof) sounds exactly like toi (you). They're pronounced /twa/. And so

égal à ne former pour tous
qu’un seul toit
je dis l’unique toit tutélaire...


is at once

equivalent to forming for all
just one roof
I say the only protective roof...


and

equivalent to forming for all
just one you
I say the only protective you...


I have not been able to find a way around this, and therefore opted for the literal roof meaning at the expense of the you meaning embodied by sound alone. Any ideas around this?

5 voices:

Robin Konarz said...

A very lovely poem of unity. Even though you had a little difficulty with the English translation, I'm glad you did post it, as well. I studied French as a child, but I'm sorry to say, I don't remember much of it now that I'm much older!

Rethabile said...

I started reading more of Mr Césaire last year when he fell ill. I haven't looked back since. It is a lovely piece of work. And I enjoyed tinkering with it.

Michelle said...

Love this, Ret. Thank you for the translation.

clarabella said...

Rethabile: Thank you so much for this. Is there also an echo of 'tu' resonating in "tutélaire" that begs to be conveyed? I think I'm seeing and hearing something there, though my French is so terribly rusty... 1heart Pam

Rethabile said...

Pam,
I think there is, yes, but weaker because it isn't a whole word, but part of one. I would have liked to have heard the old man read this, because perhaps he stops and starts and pauses to insert the "tu" somehow.

How he could write!